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Shattered on the Floor by ~thisgirl32:iconthisgirl32:





I'm looking into your face, your eyes.
Your smile unchanging, frozen.
A million miles away, you laugh,
you chat, you smile.
But your picture stays the same.

This cool glass separates us,
An invisible barriar between you and I.
My fingers cannot touch you, feel you,
Or taste your salty moonlit skin.

And as I sweep away the barriar,
That separated us before.
I crust your picture underfoot,
(That beauty crumpled underfoot)
My heart is shattered on the floor.
©2004-2009 ~thisgirl32
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Author's Comments

This is the first time I've EVER written anything that could be classed as a sonnet, and I kinda like it. I don't know what else to say, just I kinda like it!

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wow I love this 1 ! so amazing ! I also love the picture at the top :) I'm gonna fave this :D great work !

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i was here but now im gone i left my name to turn u on those who know me know me well those who don't can go to hell !!!
:iconnumberonefan:
beautiful writing. this is the first sonnet i have read on dA in the little over a year i have been here, and it was definitely not a dissappointment. i am glad you were able to find the words to fit into the form without it seeming at all forced. great job! you have brought some great imagery into this as well. :w00t: awesome poem.

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:iconwhisperingopal:
Wow..this one is very powerful. Very well written. For some reason one word is sticking out at me - "chat". Hee hee, it just seems to belong to a different world, but it's an interesting effect. I like :-)
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beautiful! Yes, I like it a lot too!
:hug:

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:iconpicabo:
it's beautiful...well written:D
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:iconwitheringsoul:
Wow...That's completely amazing. I didn't really understand that it was a picture at first...I was thinking along the lines of an invisible barrier behind you that keep you from communicating or something of that sort. Hehe. :D But I really love it!

<3

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"If you die first, I am definitely going to eat you, but the question is, if I die, what are you going to do? Bon appétit... Eat or die."

-Ravenous (1999)

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