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Try Soulmates On For Size by ~thisgirl32:iconthisgirl32:



More serious than a sisterly squabble;
we were closer than siblings. Try soulmates
on for size. Maybe it will still fit.

I never could back pedal. While you're
off out in your little blue car I'm cycling
along behind, and…surprise surprise, I
can't

keep

up.

You flatten the grass with those gold pumps,
and I wish it could be me. After you've gone I
lay in the space you've vacated; a vacation
from being invisible. You speak in bubbles,
each word formed from emptiness to become
Conscientious, Hard Working, Lacking In Nothing…
But effort, maybe.  

We walked home in the rain. I was wearing my shirt and
skirt, blazer, tights and tie. We were so close, you
drenched me. I was your umbrella. I kept you dry

and






Sane?

I put that old outfit on the other day. Try soulmates on for size.
Mine still fits.
©2006-2009 ~thisgirl32
:iconthisgirl32:

Author's Comments

I think that the cliche: "to try something on for size" is a strange one. It's obvious what you're doing if you're trying something on, so why "for size?" I guess what I'm saying with this phrase in this poem is that you're not trying the word soulmates for what it is, or what it may be because we know we are soulmates....

(It's not the shoes, the bag, the shawl... it's the dress you're trying on)

but you're being given a yes or no question, despite the imperitives. Will you try be my soulmate?

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:iconblackoberst:
"lay in the space you've vacated; a vacation "

I don't fancy this line too much...

All in all nice imagery and glad to see something new from you.

--
When you peel away everything else, all that is left is yourself...
:iconthisgirl32:
Is it the repitition? Or the imagery in general? This is one of those pieces I'm prepared to edit if people will suggest what could be changed.

--
She's the type of girl who leaves condoms on her bedroom dresser...
:iconblackoberst:
The repetition... sure repetition can be very poetic sometimes... but I don't think it really belongs there... it gives off a sense of... well... I just feel wrong reading it like this... I'm not saying I'm some kind of guru that considers that wahatever he says goes, but you might try to change it, see how it feels... if you like it another way, modify for good, if not, leave it like this and that'll be that.
It's ultimately your creation and it has to sound good to you first of all!

--
When you peel away everything else, all that is left is yourself...
:iconshowna:
this was beautiful

--
Showna was here.
:pride::pointr:don't thank me, comment on my art:pointl::pride:
:iconchronicles-of-666:
yeap, it's definitely something.. my friend gave it to me, and i can relate..

I never could back pedal. While you're
off out in your little blue car I'm cycling
along behind, and…surprise surprise, I
can't

keep

up.

this made me go insane for a while

--
There is no "I" in team.
:iconshowna:
Can I post this on my blog at myspace with a link and credit to you?

--
Showna was here.
:pride::pointr:don't thank me, comment on my art:pointl::pride:
:iconthisgirl32:
yeah, on the one condition that you add me on myspace too - :P - [link]
thank you, it's a lovely thing to ask/say

--
She's the type of girl who leaves condoms on her bedroom dresser...
:iconshowna:
I am [link] :heart:

--
Showna was here.
:pride::pointr:don't thank me, comment on my art:pointl::pride:

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